WALT…
Use paragraphs to link similar ideas together
write in structured, well developed paragraphs that flow well from one to the next within the text
use linking words and phrases to link paragraphs for effect
Use paragraphs to link similar ideas together
write in structured, well developed paragraphs that flow well from one to the next within the text
use linking words and phrases to link paragraphs for effect
We had to describe a picture of a man in a dark wood cabin, everyone in room 6 did this writing and we all came up with a different backstory and perspective. Before we started writing, we did some reading about paragraph writing which guided us while we were brainstorming the five scenes. Also while I was writing I tried to use some interesting vocabulary, I used a site called wordhippo.
When I was writing this descriptive text it was hard to come up with a link between the paragraphs so it flows, but in the end I managed to come up with a story line that can flow well between the text. But overall I wrote as the point of view of me watching the man/telling the story and in third person.
When I was writing this descriptive text it was hard to come up with a link between the paragraphs so it flows, but in the end I managed to come up with a story line that can flow well between the text. But overall I wrote as the point of view of me watching the man/telling the story and in third person.
Next Steps : Making my sentence structure better and using a bigger variety of sentence types.
What I enjoyed: Getting to express my way of thinking for this picture.
What I found challenging: Finishing my paragraph writing on time.
Darkness
He hides in a dark abandoned wood cabin with only one room, while he lays uncomfortably in the dirty corner. As the man aches in pain, his fragile bones slowly move to change his position. The man’s blood sweat and tears all drip down, as his lonely thoughts keep him awake. The midnight darkness starts to howl, while a strong gust of wind thrashes towards the window from outside. While the rain starts to leak from the moldy window, he listens to the forest storms. The sound of a car passing gives him a sense of anxiety; assuming that it someone coming to find him.
He staggers over to the window to see a foggy bright vibrant yellow light in the darkness, then the yellow light turns off. He then ducks down from the window; so nobody will see him. his heart starts pounding heavily. Within seconds a tremendous hard-knock bang on the door. He avoids answering the door; but hides in fear. Another hard knock appears across the door then the door burst open, a tall tough man comes inside the dark wooden cabin, he stays hiding in the corner. The tall man shadows over the weak skinny man, he whispers “please I’m innocent it wasn’t me” the tall man replies with “that’s just the way the world works” he drags the weak man out of the cabin and they drive off nowhere to be seen.
What I found challenging: Finishing my paragraph writing on time.
Darkness
He hides in a dark abandoned wood cabin with only one room, while he lays uncomfortably in the dirty corner. As the man aches in pain, his fragile bones slowly move to change his position. The man’s blood sweat and tears all drip down, as his lonely thoughts keep him awake. The midnight darkness starts to howl, while a strong gust of wind thrashes towards the window from outside. While the rain starts to leak from the moldy window, he listens to the forest storms. The sound of a car passing gives him a sense of anxiety; assuming that it someone coming to find him.
He staggers over to the window to see a foggy bright vibrant yellow light in the darkness, then the yellow light turns off. He then ducks down from the window; so nobody will see him. his heart starts pounding heavily. Within seconds a tremendous hard-knock bang on the door. He avoids answering the door; but hides in fear. Another hard knock appears across the door then the door burst open, a tall tough man comes inside the dark wooden cabin, he stays hiding in the corner. The tall man shadows over the weak skinny man, he whispers “please I’m innocent it wasn’t me” the tall man replies with “that’s just the way the world works” he drags the weak man out of the cabin and they drive off nowhere to be seen.
Well done Mikaela, you have worked hard to ensure that your paragraphs are well developed and you have demonstrated you can use words/phrases to make links between. Keep up the awesome work!
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